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作者: 523 时间: 2007-6-16 16:07 标题: After the life of high school

He whom i like very much was not good at English while English is my favourite subject and i am good at it ,he alway asked me to teach him.But i am not good at teaching ,so i am very sorry for this.
  Now,we are all graduated from shool.I want to stay with him as the time we keep in the school ,but i can't ,because he has gone back to his "old home",that is to say,there will be a long time when i can see him.
  What i want to do now is call him,but i can't call him everytime i miss him.And,the most important is that he keep me as his brother, he has a beautiful girlfriend who is my friend...
  WHO CAN HELP ME TO FORGET A MAN WHO I LIKE VERY MUCH?I DON'T WANT TO LEAD A LIFE WHERE I MISS HIM AFTER THE LIFE OF HIGH SCHOOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

作者: niwota 时间: 2007-6-16 18:23

都不知道你說什麽....

作者: 亚特兰帝斯 时间: 2007-6-16 22:14

GOOD!

我也看不懂。

作者: 122499647 时间: 2007-6-16 23:01

有几个错误哦............

作者: 122499647 时间: 2007-6-16 23:08

帮你改改

He whom i like very much is(他是以前不擅长还是到现在还不擅长?用is比较恰当吧) not good at English while English is my favourite subject and i am good at it .(这一句已经说完,下一句是另一个开头,所以用句号He alway asked me to teach him,(but与上半句存在转折关系,故应该用逗号)but i am not good at teaching ,so i am very sorry for this.
  Now,we all graduated(去掉are,你们毕业应该是主动吧?怎么是被动的呢?) from shool.I want to stay with him as the time we keep in the school ,but i can't ,because he has gone back to his "old home",that is to say,there will be a long time before(此处用when不恰当) i can see him.
  What i want to do now is call him,but i can't call him everytime i miss him.Besides(and一般不做独立副词),the most important is that he consider(好少见keep as,consider as 把....看作...) me as his brother, he has a beautiful girlfriend who is my friend...
  WHO CAN HELP ME TO FORGET A MAN WHO I LIKE VERY MUCH?I DON'T WANT TO LEAD A LIFE WHERE I MISS HIM AFTER THE LIFE OF HIGH SCHOOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

作者: niwota 时间: 2007-6-17 09:53

原帖由 122499647 于 2007-6-16 23:08 发表
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He whom i like very much is(他是以前不擅长还是到现在还不擅长?用is比较恰当吧) not good at English while English is my favourite subject and i am good at it .(这一句已经说完,下一句是另一 ...

我只能說你狠有空....

作者: 122499647 时间: 2007-6-17 12:32

没树干哦......以前习惯了挑自己写作的文章的毛病,哈,习惯成自然

作者: 点解点解 时间: 2007-6-17 13:30

我晕 .
还跑出了个 .
评论老师来了 ..
呵呵 .

作者: 李坤文 时间: 2007-6-17 13:53

old home..新单词..

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the time will help you to foget the man who you like ..

作者: 523 时间: 2007-6-18 14:13

thank you everyone!!!!!!!
特别是那个"老师",谢啦!!有空请你喝几杯,呵呵,你是东中选物理的吧!蛮帅的,因为我在学校有见过你、哦

作者: 122499647 时间: 2007-6-18 18:24

原帖由 523 于 2007-6-18 14:13 发表
thank you everyone!!!!!!!
特别是那个"老师",谢啦!!有空请你喝几杯,呵呵,你是东中选物理的吧!蛮帅的,因为我在学校有见过你、哦

是东中的.....你认识我?? 怎么我不知道你的?

作者: 523 时间: 2007-6-19 19:45

东中有多大?帅哥有多少个?

作者: 122499647 时间: 2007-6-19 19:51

你是高三的? 哪个班? 什么名字?

作者: 523 时间: 2007-6-19 20:15

不好意思,我也是雄的

作者: 523 时间: 2007-6-19 20:18 标题: 回复 #9 李坤文的帖子

你说的很有道理,时间会帮我们忘记一切不开心的东西

作者: niwota 时间: 2007-6-20 21:09

七衰包咯...
其也喊靓仔哦~~~
贡我冒话讲咯....

作者: 122499647 时间: 2007-6-21 22:40

原帖由 niwota 于 2007-6-20 21:09 发表
七衰包咯...
其也喊靓仔哦~~~
贡我冒话讲咯....

虽然本人并不帅气.....用不着这样踩吧?

作者: 523 时间: 2007-6-22 14:33 标题: >..<

理科前五名
拿奖学金就他好看些,他真人是挺可爱的

作者: 122499647 时间: 2007-6-22 16:23

原帖由 523 于 2007-6-22 14:33 发表
理科前五名
拿奖学金就他好看些,他真人是挺可爱的

可爱??

男生可爱是一种可悲哦,地理老师说的.

作者: niwota 时间: 2007-6-22 17:30

原帖由 122499647 于 2007-6-21 22:40 发表

虽然本人并不帅气.....用不着这样踩吧?

不好意思吖~~~
踩過份勒點.....
好吧,
我承認,
你不樣衰....

作者: niwota 时间: 2007-6-22 17:32

原帖由 122499647 于 2007-6-22 16:23 发表

可爱?? 男生可爱是一种可悲哦,地理老师说的.

我也是這樣覺得的,
男人,
就要成熟才有魅力....

作者: Daisy 时间: 2007-6-22 17:54

我英语虽然不怎么掂..
基本还是看懂了
最近也遇到跟你一样有这种苦恼的人
我开解他就说了四个字"顺其自然"
也希望你能做到...用平常心对待吧...
你能走出爱情的漩涡的

但也发现了错误..
前用了but,,后可以用so的嘛?

作者: 蛋壳 时间: 2007-6-30 23:53

太顺畅了,可能有点中式英文的感觉

作者: niwota 时间: 2007-7-1 19:31

純屬英語水平問題....

作者: 小丸子 时间: 2007-7-7 20:34

讓一切成爲回憶吧。。而且他還是你好朋友的男朋友

      這種關係最難處理啊。。

               畢業了，換個新環境，過新生活

         加油～

作者: apple0159 时间: 2007-7-8 11:24

say clear to him.you can make a friend with him.

作者: showdoo 时间: 2007-7-16 15:19 标题: ...

find another person...
and fall in love with him...
time will help ...

作者: 。我爱牛牛。 时间: 2007-7-24 22:36

那个龙少的习惯真的很好喔.
会那样挑自己文章毛病的学生已经很少很少的了..

作者: 122499647 时间: 2007-7-25 15:37

原帖由 。我爱牛牛。 于 2007-7-24 22:36 发表
那个龙少的习惯真的很好喔.
会那样挑自己文章毛病的学生已经很少很少的了..

英语的一些毛病有时会很隐蔽,很难发现,但是读起来就是不顺的. 我讨厌英语读不顺的感觉,所以就有挑毛病的习惯

作者: 欧对天空说 时间: 2007-8-10 12:01 标题: 回复 #29 122499647 的帖子

Your habit is very good.I think if each students are like you similar habit of having this, so English will very easily learn.

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