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523 发表于 2007-6-16 16:07

After the life of high school

He whom i like very much was not good at English while English is my favourite subject and i am good at it ,he alway asked me to teach him.But i am not good at teaching ,so i am very sorry for this.
  Now,we are all graduated from shool.I want to stay with him as the time we keep in the school ,but i can't ,because he has gone back to his "old home",that is to say,there will be a long time when i can see him.  
  What i want to do now is call him,but i can't call him everytime i miss him.And,the most important is that he keep me as his brother, he has a beautiful girlfriend who is my friend...
  WHO CAN HELP ME TO FORGET A MAN WHO I LIKE VERY MUCH?I DON'T WANT TO LEAD A LIFE WHERE I MISS HIM AFTER THE LIFE OF HIGH SCHOOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

niwota 发表于 2007-6-16 18:23

都不知道你說什麽....:29: :29: :29:

亚特兰帝斯 发表于 2007-6-16 22:14

GOOD!

我也看不懂。:11:

122499647 发表于 2007-6-16 23:01

有几个错误哦............

122499647 发表于 2007-6-16 23:08

帮你改改

He whom i like very much is(他是以前不擅长还是到现在还不擅长?用is比较恰当吧) not good at English while English is my favourite subject and i am good at it .(这一句已经说完,下一句是另一个开头,所以用句号He alway asked me to teach him,(but与上半句存在转折关系,故应该用逗号)but i am not good at teaching ,so i am very sorry for this.
  Now,we all graduated(去掉are,你们毕业应该是主动吧?怎么是被动的呢?) from shool.I want to stay with him as the time we keep in the school ,but i can't ,because he has gone back to his "old home",that is to say,there will be a long time before(此处用when不恰当) i can see him.  
  What i want to do now is call him,but i can't call him everytime i miss him.Besides(and一般不做独立副词),the most important is that he consider(好少见keep as,consider as 把....看作...) me as his brother, he has a beautiful girlfriend who is my friend...
  WHO CAN HELP ME TO FORGET A MAN WHO I LIKE VERY MUCH?I DON'T WANT TO LEAD A LIFE WHERE I MISS HIM AFTER THE LIFE OF HIGH SCHOOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

niwota 发表于 2007-6-17 09:53

[quote]原帖由 [i]122499647[/i] 于 2007-6-16 23:08 发表 [url=http://www.hyxs.net/bbs/redirect.php?goto=findpost&pid=443120&ptid=23492][img]http://www.hyxs.net/bbs/images/common/back.gif[/img][/url]
帮你改改

He whom i like very much is(他是以前不擅长还是到现在还不擅长?用is比较恰当吧) not good at English while English is my favourite subject and i am good at it .(这一句已经说完,下一句是另一 ... [/quote]
我只能說你狠有空....:35:

122499647 发表于 2007-6-17 12:32

没树干哦......以前习惯了挑自己写作的文章的毛病,哈,习惯成自然

点解点解 发表于 2007-6-17 13:30

我晕 .
还跑出了个 .
评论老师来了  ..
呵呵 .:33:

李坤文 发表于 2007-6-17 13:53

old home..新单词..:37:
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the time will help you to foget the man who you like ..

523 发表于 2007-6-18 14:13

thank you everyone!!!!!!!
特别是那个"老师",谢啦!!有空请你喝几杯,呵呵,你是东中选物理的吧!蛮帅的,因为我在学校有见过 你、哦

122499647 发表于 2007-6-18 18:24

[quote]原帖由 [i]523[/i] 于 2007-6-18 14:13 发表 [url=http://www.hyxs.net/bbs/redirect.php?goto=findpost&pid=444202&ptid=23492][img]http://www.hyxs.net/bbs/images/common/back.gif[/img][/url]
thank you everyone!!!!!!!
特别是那个"老师",谢啦!!有空请你喝几杯,呵呵,你是东中选物理的吧!蛮帅的,因为我在学校有见过 你、哦 [/quote]

是东中的.....你认识我?? 怎么我不知道你的?

523 发表于 2007-6-19 19:45

东中有多大?帅哥有多少个?

122499647 发表于 2007-6-19 19:51

:8: :13:

你是高三的? 哪个班? 什么名字?

523 发表于 2007-6-19 20:15

不好意思,我也是雄的

523 发表于 2007-6-19 20:18

回复 #9 李坤文 的帖子

你说的很有道理,时间会帮我们忘记一切不开心的东西

niwota 发表于 2007-6-20 21:09

七衰包咯...
其也喊靓仔哦~~~
贡我冒话讲咯....

122499647 发表于 2007-6-21 22:40

[quote]原帖由 [i]niwota[/i] 于 2007-6-20 21:09 发表 [url=http://www.hyxs.net/bbs/redirect.php?goto=findpost&pid=445690&ptid=23492][img]http://www.hyxs.net/bbs/images/common/back.gif[/img][/url]
七衰包咯...
其也喊靓仔哦~~~
贡我冒话讲咯.... [/quote]


虽然本人并不帅气.....用不着这样踩吧?

523 发表于 2007-6-22 14:33

>..<

理科前五名
拿奖学金就他好看些,他真人是挺可爱的

122499647 发表于 2007-6-22 16:23

[quote]原帖由 [i]523[/i] 于 2007-6-22 14:33 发表 [url=http://www.hyxs.net/bbs/redirect.php?goto=findpost&pid=446816&ptid=23492][img]http://www.hyxs.net/bbs/images/common/back.gif[/img][/url]
理科前五名
拿奖学金就他好看些,他真人是挺可爱的 [/quote]

可爱?? :48:   男生可爱是一种可悲哦,地理老师说的.

niwota 发表于 2007-6-22 17:30

[quote]原帖由 [i]122499647[/i] 于 2007-6-21 22:40 发表 [url=http://www.hyxs.net/bbs/redirect.php?goto=findpost&pid=446505&ptid=23492][img]http://www.hyxs.net/bbs/images/common/back.gif[/img][/url]



虽然本人并不帅气.....用不着这样踩吧? [/quote]
:34: :34: :34:
不好意思吖~~~
踩過份勒點.....
好吧,
我承認,
你不樣衰....

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